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“Dad don’t tell Lilly where I am going to hide, “said Sara running past dad
“28 29 and 30 I’m gonna find you,” said Lilly
“Oh on where am I going to hide”.
“Daddy do you know where Sara is,” says Lilly
“I’m not allowed to tell you,” dad said
"Ohhhhhhhh but why" .
"Because you always win and it's not fear on sara try this time I know you can do it."
"Mummy do you know where sara is"
"No but can you help me do the clothing"
"Okay
"I know the best place to hide under the bed "said sara
"Are we done"
"Nope"
One hour later
"And done"
"Now can you help me find sara"
"Nope we have to go shopping for dinner tonight and since you helped me do the clothing you can get a treat"said mum
"Lilly is taking her jolly good time I should see where she is"say sara trying to get out from under the bed
"DAD DAD I CAN'T GET OUT FROM UNDER THE BED!!!"
"not again"
Dad went upstairs to help sara get out from under the bed
"HOW MUCH TIME'S DO I HAVE TO TELL YOU STOP GOING UNDER THE BED"
"I'm sorry"
Lilly and mum came back from the store
"I found you haha I win".
I like the idea of Lily going off with mum while Sara is hiding from her. That makes the ordinary game of hids and seek, less ordinary and more interesting.
ReplyDeleteYou have recorded dialogue corretly, using speech marks and only one speaker on each line. Well done. Maybe at the end you could have told us how Sara felt about Lily not really trying very hard to even find her.